The Demon Within the Forest
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| (Soorpanaka on the ground in pain after her nose was cut off by Lakshmana. Rama and Sita are standing behind him. Image source: Wikipedia.) |
The mother of Rama, Kaikeyi, wants her biological son, Bharata, to
become the heir to the throne. She therefore orders Rama, her other son, to
be exiled to the forest. The story follows the journey of Rama, Sita, and Lakshmana as they encounter numerous obstacles during Rama's exile. They come to encounter the evil demon, Soorpanaka, who brings danger upon them. Will Rama be able to defeat Soorpanaka and save his family? Read to find out!
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Redemption's the Winner
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Redemption's the Winner
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| (Ravana and Rama battling) Link to "Redemption's the Winner" Story. Infuriated, Rama wages a battle with Ravana to save his beloved wife. What will happen when Rama decides to unleash the Maya weapon? Will it be enough for him to save his wife? Or will he leave this battle empty-handed? Read to find out! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The Reconciliation  Link to "The Reconciliation" Story |
Cursed, King Pandu relives his death over and over again. Will King Pandu be able to break this wretched curse? Or will he be doomed to die in the arms of his wife for eternity? Read to find out!
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How the Mind Kills
After finding out that one of the sons of his sister, Devaki, would one day kill him, Kamsa makes it his mission to stop this horrible fate. Will he be able to maintain his position on the throne? Or will he be doomed to meet this horrible fate? Read to find out!
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The Journey of Mohini
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How the Mind Kills
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| (Krishna killing Kamsa) Link to "How the Mind Kills" Story |
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The Journey of Mohini
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| (Mohini) Link to "The Journey of Mohini" Story Mohini just can't seem to find her purpose in life. Was she born to just exist? Or is there something bigger in store for her? Read to find out! |
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I liked that you have a picture with your description in the portfolio. Your description also gives us the background information so that you are not left wondering about why the three of them were in the forest in the first place. You give information that leaves the readers hanging and wanting to find out more about what happens. I also enjoyed reading the story itself, it was very creative and something that you would never think of. In all of the versions of Ramayan that I have read or even seen, nothing of this nature has ever occurred so it was a very nice and refreshing change. I also like that you included Jatayu in this experience, he helped ram in the original story and he even helps him now, which was great. The visual descriptions were also great, it helped me imagine the scene out and see exactly what you were seeing when you were writing out your story.
ReplyDeleteHi Linh! I had a wonderful time reading through your stories. My personal favorite is actually "Redemption's the Winner," which I commented on earlier in the semester, but I came back to read your latest piece and I enjoy that one as well. I think you did a nice job carrying over a similar redemption theme into this piece; although Pandu is still cursed, like Ravana he sees the error of his ways. I know that you said that Pandu became a fearful and unjust king at the beginning because he grew up learning that it was okay to harm people in order to get his way; however, I think that the story may be more effective if you could think of anything more specific to use. Was there a particular event he watched unfold, or was the king before him equally mean spirited?
ReplyDeleteAside from making his motivations a bit clearer, I think you did a fantastic job and I hope to be back again to read your last story.
Hello Linh! Well done here! I've very much enjoyed reading the stories you've chosen for your portfolio. They're all connected pretty well through a similar stylistic form and also similar tone in the writing. I personally enjoyed "Redemption's the Winner". It was really a very fun read and it didn't feel overdone in any way, shape, or form. When I was in advanced fiction writing at OU, there was a big point for a story to contain everything it needs and nothing more, and I think you've done a very good job getting very close to that goal. Your stories aren't inherently short but it feels like everything important is there right now. I think you could perhaps add some more concrete details so that your readers can be centered exactly in the piece where you want them to be. Otherwise, well done and thanks for sharing! Good luck with any and all revisions and additions you make in the future to this portfolio!
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